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  • English IV

    April 18-22

  • Monday, April 18 (Period 1)

    Tuesday, April 19 (Period 2)

  • The final product of this reading test:

    • Housekeeping

    • Review

    • Into the Wild, Chapters 7-13

      Reading Test

    • Missing assignments, including absolute due dates for submission, are posted.

    • Senior activity packets

    • Literary Events

      Due April 30

    • 1

    • 2

    • 3

    • 4

    • 5

    • 6

    • 7

    • 8

    • Silent Writing

    • Pair 1

    • Silent Writing

    • Pair 2

    • Silent Writing

    • Pair 3

    • Silent Writing

    • The prompt is your best friend.

    • Use the language (key terms) of the prompt throughout.

    • “To be” is an “equal”s sign.

    • You’re a blank! A cipher! I swear, if you existed, I’d divorce you!

    • Grave error: comma splice!

      The comma splice is one of the most egregious errors of punctuation and constitutes a grave error in work you submit to me. It is called a comma splice because a “comma is used to splice together two complete sentences when that isn’t the function of a comma.” Refer to “Comma Splices” in our shared locker for a complete explanation of the comma splice and its elimination, for eliminate it you must!

    • Beware “however”!!

    • Understatement and Unnecessary Qualification

    • Phrasal Verbs and Stylistic Sophistication

      Prefer simple verbs, i.e. verbs that consist of a single word, to phrasal verbs.

    • Brainstorm, categorize, delineate, etc.

    • Discuss

    • Prompt

    • Critique

    • Revise; interpretive claim and topic sentences

    • Critique

    • Revise

    • Patti Lupone

      A. P. English Literature and Composition

      Joseph E. Hill

      November 4, 2002

      Salient Feature: The Bluest Eye, Pages 61-183

    • Why would you use an interrogative in a declarative sentence? An interrogative in a declarative sentence is tantamount to a cipher in the midst of your assertion. How can your reader be expected to comprehend your argument when you yourself replace important information with an interrogative?

    • Avoid understatement and unnecessary qualification. They demonstrate a lack of conviction on your part and tend to contribute to simplistic interpretation.

    • From Matt Herron:

      In my time editing my own writing and the writing of others, I’ve found one surefire way to make weak writing stronger. Not only does this technique eliminate unnecessary words, it also improves precision and clarity in any piece. As an added bonus, following one simple rule will make your writing appear more professional, and as any copywriter, content strategist, or technical writer understands, professionalism is essential when writing for clients.

    • In the flashback to Pauline Breedlove’s youth in The Bluest Eye, Toni Morrison discloses the encounters with covert racism which instill in Pauline the impossible desire to meet white standards of beauty and thereby rob her of the capacity to love both herself and Pecola.

    • Do not replace important information with interrogatives, that is, words that ask questions.

    • The rule is this: get rid of phrasal verbs.

    • Pauline’s encounters with covert racism lead her to believe that beauty is uniquely white and to fantasize that such beauty is accessible to her. She first encounters racism at the movies, where she learns a “scale of absolute beauty.” Pauline is unable to see that the world of white film where “the flawed became whole” is fantastic. This world excludes and is destructive for her, as does the world of the wealthy white which she later enters as a servant. Her second encounter with racism occurs in the home of her employers, where she indulges the fantasy of ownership of white beauty; Pauline believes that they are “her floors” and that her nickname indicates the family’s acceptance of her, rather than realizing that floors are only hers to clean and that her nickname indicates the truth of her subservience. She ironically fails to recognize that she has no real place in that home, just as she has no place in the movies.

    • Incorrect: “what is necessary for Elizabeth to do”; “what Winterbourne believes”; “how they get where they are going.”

    • I would add that a writer’s methodical inclusion of simple verbs, particularly those derived from Latin, signifies to AP readers and college professors that the writer’s vocabulary is rich and precise. Make the acquisition of these verbs, their inclusion in your writing, and the elimination of unnecessary phrasal verbs a high priority, and, in all likelihood, your writing will attain higher degrees of sophistication, precision, accuracy, and economy.

    • Pauline is unable to love that which does not appear to her to be whole, and because she has learned that to be whole is to be white, she is able to love neither herself nor Pecola. She attempts to make herself whole through a well-ordered fantasy in which she is part of the white world. Pecola is an intrusion of reality upon that fantasy. She is to Pauline the antithesis of order and beauty, and Pauline is able to love neither herself nor this child who is according to that “absolute scale of beauty” also flawed and ugly.

    • Correct the errors.

    • Claim, in terms of the prompt

    • Topic sentence 1, including terms of the prompt and claim

    • Topic sentence 2, including terms of the prompt and claim

    • Topic sentence 3, including terms of the prompt and claim

      Optional

    • Correct: “the necessity that Elizabeth marry”; “Winterbourne’s belief that Daisy has compromised her honor”; “the steamer that carries them to Chillon.”

      • Textual reference 1

        Page number and summary

      • Textual reference 2

        Page number and summary

      • Textual reference 3

        Page number and summary

      • Textual reference 4

        Page number and summary

      • (By the way, the examples of incorrect phrasing demonstrate another error: in both cases, “what” should in fact be “that which.”)

        In many cases, the difference between the correct, complete, and more sophisticated assertion and the incorrect, incomplete, and unsophisticated quasi-assertion is merely a matter of including the correct noun.

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A cipher! I swear, if you existed, I'd divorce you!**\n\n\n\n\n\n"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063ca","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799869,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063c9","content":"# **Why would you use an interrogative in a declarative sentence? An interrogative in a declarative sentence is tantamount to a cipher in the midst of your assertion. How can your reader be expected to comprehend your argument when you yourself replace important information with an interrogative?**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cb","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799870,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063ca","content":""},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cc","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799871,"position":2,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063ca","content":"# **Do not replace important information with interrogatives, that is, words that ask questions.**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cd","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799872,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cc","content":"# **Incorrect: \"what is necessary for Elizabeth to do\"; \"what Winterbourne believes\"; \"how they get where they are going.\"**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063ce","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799873,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cd","content":"# **Correct the errors.**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cf","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799874,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063ce","content":"# **Correct: \"the necessity that Elizabeth marry\"; \"Winterbourne's belief that Daisy has compromised her honor\"; \"the steamer that carries them to Chillon.\"**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d0","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799875,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063cf","content":"# **(By the way, the examples of incorrect phrasing demonstrate another error: in both cases, \"what\" should in fact be \"that which.\")**\n\n# **In many cases, the difference between the correct, complete, and more sophisticated assertion and the incorrect, incomplete, and unsophisticated quasi-assertion is merely a matter of including the correct noun.**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063c8","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800048,"position":10.5,"parentId":"66d16ea31f4f85644900015b","content":"# **5**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d2","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800030,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063c8","content":"# **Grave error: comma splice! **\n\n# **The comma splice is one of the most egregious errors of punctuation and constitutes a grave error in work you submit to me. It is called a comma splice because a \"comma is used to splice together two complete sentences when that isn't the function of a comma.\" Refer to \"Comma Splices\" in our shared locker for a complete explanation of the comma splice and its elimination, for eliminate it you must!**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d1","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800047,"position":11,"parentId":"66d16ea31f4f85644900015b","content":"# **6**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d4","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800032,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d1","content":"# **Beware \"however\"!!**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d3","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800044,"position":12,"parentId":"66d16ea31f4f85644900015b","content":"# **7**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d6","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800034,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d3","content":"# **Understatement and Unnecessary Qualification**\n"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d7","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799882,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d6","content":"# **Avoid understatement and unnecessary qualification. They demonstrate a lack of conviction on your part and tend to contribute to simplistic interpretation.**\n"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d5","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800045,"position":13,"parentId":"66d16ea31f4f85644900015b","content":"# **8**"},{"_id":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d8","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800037,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d5","content":"# **Phrasal Verbs and Stylistic Sophistication**\n\n# **Prefer simple verbs, i.e. verbs that consist of a single word, to phrasal verbs.**"},{"_id":"66d17ae91f4f8564490001e3","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6799901,"position":1,"parentId":"5714f220e52a74264dc063d8","content":"# **From Matt Herron:**\n\n# **In my time editing my own writing and the writing of others, I’ve found one surefire way to make weak writing stronger. Not only does this technique eliminate unnecessary words, it also improves precision and clarity in any piece. 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Make the acquisition of these verbs, their inclusion in your writing, and the elimination of unnecessary phrasal verbs a high priority, and, in all likelihood, your writing will attain higher degrees of sophistication, precision, accuracy, and economy.**"},{"_id":"66d17d721f4f8564490001e6","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800027,"position":1,"parentId":"66d17c6d1f4f8564490001e5","content":"# **Resource(s): http://thephuse.com/content-strategy/how-to-make-weak-writing-stronger-by-eliminating-phrasal-verbs/; http://www.gsbe.co.uk/style-phrasal-verbs.html; https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Phrasalverb**"},{"_id":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6820127,"position":3,"parentId":"66d1673f1f4f856449000157","content":"# ***Into the Wild*, Chapters 7-13**\n# **Reading Test**"},{"_id":"66d192431f4f8564490001ea","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800088,"position":0.5,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Silent Writing**"},{"_id":"66d197161f4f8564490001f1","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800521,"position":1,"parentId":"66d192431f4f8564490001ea","content":"# **Brainstorm, categorize, delineate, etc.**"},{"_id":"66d18b7b1f4f8564490001e9","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800087,"position":1,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Pair 1**"},{"_id":"66d198781f4f8564490001f2","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800111,"position":1,"parentId":"66d18b7b1f4f8564490001e9","content":"# **Discuss**"},{"_id":"66d193191f4f8564490001ec","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800098,"position":1.5,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Silent Writing**"},{"_id":"66d196911f4f8564490001f0","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800110,"position":1,"parentId":"66d193191f4f8564490001ec","content":"# **Prompt**"},{"_id":"66d192c41f4f8564490001eb","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800091,"position":2,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Pair 2**"},{"_id":"66d199101f4f8564490001f3","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800113,"position":1,"parentId":"66d192c41f4f8564490001eb","content":"# **Critique**"},{"_id":"66d195781f4f8564490001ef","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6812828,"position":2.5,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Silent Writing**"},{"_id":"66d199901f4f8564490001f4","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800125,"position":1,"parentId":"66d195781f4f8564490001ef","content":"# **Revise; interpretive claim and topic sentences**"},{"_id":"66d1942c1f4f8564490001ed","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800099,"position":3,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Pair 3**"},{"_id":"66d19b321f4f8564490001f5","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800126,"position":1,"parentId":"66d1942c1f4f8564490001ed","content":"# **Critique**"},{"_id":"66d1954c1f4f8564490001ee","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800100,"position":4,"parentId":"66d188d21f4f8564490001e8","content":"# **Silent Writing**"},{"_id":"66d19b8d1f4f8564490001f6","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6800128,"position":1,"parentId":"66d1954c1f4f8564490001ee","content":"# **Revise**"},{"_id":"66e2bc7b92c65a9cfc000074","treeId":"66d163751f4f856449000154","seq":6812836,"position":3,"parentId":null,"content":"# **The final product of this reading test:**"}],"tree":{"_id":"66d163751f4f856449000154","name":"English IV, April 18-22","publicUrl":"english-iv-april-18-22"}}