Lead-in

build up to thesis statement

All our dreams can come true if we have the courage to pursue them

Thesis statement:

I am very strong because I a person that whatever I think I make it happen, such as pursue my goals, learn for my experience and enjoy my hobbies to distract me.

Topic sentence 1:

I am a person that I like to achieve my goals and don’t give up for any obstacle.

Supporting details:

•I study nursing.
•I learn another language such as English and Spanish.

Concluding sentence:

All of my family support me with my plans because they will want to be a successful person.

Topic sentence 2:

I had good and bad experiences that has made me mature and grow as a person.

Supporting details:

•I left my home town and friends to come to this country to get a better life.

*In consequence of coming to live to McAllen I’ve had to leave part of my family and not seeing them that often.

Conclusion sentence:

Overall my experiences have get me outcome and positive thing.

Topic sentence 3:

I like to do my hobbies because it’s relaxing and helps me be better and healthier.

Supporting details:

•I exercise one hour every day.
•I read one hour every day to relax my mind.

Conclusion sentence:

My hobbies is the most important part of my life because that’s what distracts me from school.

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Paraphrase three topic sentence

Came to another country change all in my life because I met new people and tried new thing like learn another language and the opportunity to have a better education for me and my siblings.

Finals tought

Many people wish to have the opportunity that I have. Im very thankful for all blessing that I have and I know no matter how many obstacles I would have I never give up.