• Intro (6-8 sentences)

  • Body Paragraph 1 (8-12 sentences)

  • Body Paragraph 2 (8-12 sentences)

  • Body Paragraph 3 (8-12 sentences)

  • Conclusion (6-8 sentences)

  • Lead-in

  • Development (build up to the thesis)

  • Thesis

  • Topic sentence

  • Supporting details

  • Concluding sentence

  • Topic sentence

  • Supporting details

  • Concluding sentence

  • Topic sentence

  • Supporting details

  • Concluding sentence

  • Paraphrase thesis

  • Paraphrase topic sentences

  • Final thoughts

  • “Its hard to make a comeback when you haven’t been anywhere”.

  • Giving supporting details about the main idea of who I am.

  • Who am I will be based on the education and the goals I have planned for the future.

  • People think that I’m a Gangster just by the way I dress and talk.

    • Changing my life style
    • The beginning of my career
    • A better future for my son
  • I may look rough on the outside, but I’m a very determined person when it comes to my son and I have turned around my life in the past 9 months just for him.

  • Recently I have recieved my GED and now I am working on getting my degree for X-Ray Technician.

    • Attending my GED course during financially rough times
    • Dislocated shoulder during my process of getting my GED which didn’t stop me from attending class the very next day.
    • Enrolling in STC as soon as i could
  • Even though there have been several obstacles along the way. I continue forward no matter how hard it may be because if I don’t do anything better I will never get anything better.

  • Ever since my son was born I have looked at life with a different perspective he has been my sole motivation to continuing my education.

    • Wanting to give my son everything I didn’t have when i was young.
    • I know with a good job he will have everything he needs.
    • When he was born I learned to care about my future cause it was his as well.
  • In the past seven years I have had several people change my lifestyle and none of them were able too until my son was born and i realize that I had to change for the best of us.

  • About who I am today isn’t who I was a year ago but everything I have done its for the better for me and my family.

  • At first I may be judged by my appearance but I have worked very hard in the past 9 months to continue my education and i feel like i am doing a very good job so far.

  • After Everything that I have worked for I wouldn’t change where I am today for where I was a year ago.

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